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Treading Blue___ by ~addictXX:iconaddictXX:

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Blue is treading water at night under the stars,
Where its almost black as the dim sky you dream of,
But the little white lights let us survive,
As the syrupy liquid eats us alive and you hold my hand,
Hoping tomorrow will never come,
But you're gone.

Blue is the sky at noon on a sunday,
Where white fluffy clouds are like rubber-bands,
Stretched and scattered in seamless strands I wish I felt like,
As you hold your breath seeing no one is around,
Falling into emptiness,
But you fell into another test.

Blue is the dress she wore on the dance-floor,
Where time was nothing but a consuming monster,
And it flowed and wrapped around my throat,
Silk in my veins made me quietly choke,
Dying for a breath of air,
But she made me bluer then anything I've ever compared.

Blue is the pill at any hour of that night,
Hospital floors I've danced my way across,
Tears and water droplets you've caught,
Blue is nothing but a color I wish I couldn't feel.
Goodbye blues,  goodbye.
©2008-2009 ~addictXX
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Inspiration: This boy i really kinda love.
Each stanza is a different day.
All of them are the color blue.
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~SwF-Tainted:iconSwF-Tainted: Jun 16, 2008, 10:35:08 AM
Powerful words. Each line begins by making you think that it's a cheerful wonderful poem, but as you contine to read and look deeper it's got a completely different tone and mood than when you first started. NICE work.

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-Society Without Flame

Have we given up on the Passion we once lived for?
How do we expect to live for tomorrow, if we can't live beyond today?
~SoopaShank:iconSoopaShank: Jun 16, 2008, 11:24:47 AM
Completely beautiful. Youre amazing, the poem is awesome.

~im a blackish violet like the blood in my veins. when you stab it with a pencil the color doesnt change.

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Feel No Pain
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~MUSICxxJUNKIE:iconMUSICxxJUNKIE: Jun 16, 2008, 12:20:37 PM
Wowowow. This is beautiful. <3 One of your best works. It starts out happy, but then slowly descends.

Silk in my veins made me quietly choke,

Gorgeous.

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:frail:
I run till the silence splits me open. `

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~0-0StEpHaNiE:icon0-0StEpHaNiE: Jun 18, 2008, 8:47:58 AM
As always, I love it. But this one more so than a lot of others. It's really good.

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♥StEpH♥
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